Thursday, September 29, 2011

Finding out the way it is

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The sun is setting cool again
I'm trying to remember
but it makes me dizzy.
no longer sweating
breathing and thinking
and sinking deeper
and it's almost like I'm swimming.

Seems like I've been here before.
Seems so familiar.
Seems like I'm slipping
into a dream within your whisper.
it drags me under and takes me

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16 comments:

Akeith Walters said...

Another good one. Great internal beat to this one.

rivercat said...

hi akeith, thanks. This is partially inspired by Percocet and whatever drugs they put me out with. the surgery went well but i need pills for the pain.

haze said...

hello... i missed your little poems. <3

MarieHarmony said...

The Rhythm of this poem is amazing - reading your comment above I hope the pain will go away soon, it's never easy to cope with it.
Take care.

Madhulika said...

As usual.. A nicely written poem..
loved the rhymes of it :)

tywo said...

I have missed you so very much! I hope your days are going well.
Like always, your writing makes me feel.



LOVE!

rivercat said...

hi haze, thanks
I was glad to finally find your new site :)

hi marie, thanks for the nice comments. the pain is more than i expected but has peaked I think/hope :)

hi tywo, you are so kind, thanks so much. :)

Psycho Babbling Basher said...

..."into a dream within your whisper" ...
Le sigh!
Your posts always stirs the hopeful romantic in me.

zonedin said...

I love how it ends without a period. As if it is unfinished but not really. Just floating off to another dimension. I hope each day brings more healing and less pain.

Jyoti Mishra said...

Finding out the way..
lovely write up !!

Nice read !!

The PostMan said...

From one romantic and poetic person to the enxt, you are awesome.

Thank you for inspiring me

The PostMan
http://postcardsinthewind.blogspot.com/

rivercat said...

hi pbb, thnx :)
hi zoned, thnx. I guess im not a drug addict because i cant wait to stop taking the pain pills.
:)
hi jyoti thnx:)
hi postman, thnx, great name post-man. It is sad that part of what has helped man survive is so violent. post man is interesting concept to think about

tywo said...

I hope your week is going well.


LOVE!

rivercat said...

hi tywo, its ok .im recovering slowly from my surgery I hope to be able to start working out again
in 2 weeks but foe now im enjoying food again .Things taste so good when your appetite comes bak
Hope you are well :)

muted.massacres said...

the last line of this struck me so hard. amazing!
:)
<3 amber

The Dreamer said...

Just one more comment would make this look complete. ;)

I love it. I love the rhythm. It's like a dance.