Tuesday, March 22, 2011

Our Mandarin Universe

                                    "Our Mandarin Universe"   Acrylic on Digital Print




The edges of an eclipsed
 sun give birth in broken
shocks of light
to day love and life

We lift ourselves
to yawning
blades of grass near
an ocherous tree
raised by the mountains
beside us

Into an infinity
of yes as our
wings fall away
in the ultimate flight
immersed in the
syrup of our
 mandarin universe


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37 comments:

Kindred Spirit said...

You have a unique and eloquent way with words. You bring out the beautiful in even seemingly mundane things. Bravo!

zonedin said...

I love the Cuties the best! They're the sweetest.

roseanna2u said...

This poem makes me feel happy. I'd enjoy peeling the skin back, biting in and sucking the juice out. That would be sooooo delicious. <3

haze said...

you never failed to make me wonder each time i read your words... :)

Linda said...

Are the pictures, your own art work?
I'm not too hip to poetry but know what moves me, and your's does. Can't say why. It just does. I'm glad you're around.
Linda

The Dreamer said...

Yummy. I love oranges :D

Arian Tejano said...

You squeezed the saccharine side of me. Beautiful allusion, and I'd love to visit your 'mandarin universe'. Smiles :)

Nicole✗✗ said...

That is so great. You have a wonderful way with words, it's incredible! Are you sure you're not already on NZT? haha! Your poetry is always brilliant! : )

Psycho Babbling Basher said...

Your poetry is brilliant! However, it does not surprise me anymore.
I love the last stanza. It's both strongly visual and affective. Love it.

rivercat said...

Thanks to all of you for the nice comments.
The clemintine oranges have to be tasted to be believed! The blossoms smell nice too and they are almost all off now. I like taking care of the trees here (4) and each year the trees give a surprise because there's always a battle of some kind going on to destroy them and one usually for some reason is a lot better than the others. I like weeding them and feeding them and pruning them and yes, eating the fruit too! THe four trees are all different varieties of oranges.

Linda, the picture is painting for the poem I made. Mostly I use my own paintings or sometimes digitally enhanced paintings or sketches. I have a library in my computer with a ton of weird things I keep adding to so I can usually find something. IN this case, even though I have a few copies of still lifes Ive made, I needed something with a light background and had to make it for the poem ( acrylic on paper based on a photo.)

Alcina said...

A idea like this might have never crossed my mind until yes i read your piece :)

Anonymous said...

and it make me wonder which is more annoying, your little poems, or your little comments?

rivercat said...

Alcina, thanks for visiting and for the nice comment.

Anon, sometimes my comments annoy me too and I wish I didnt post some of them. As for the writing, Im sorry you dont like it but thats ok as we all have different tastes. I guess its your lucky day too because I have to go on a trip for a couple days. I dont think youre comment was a good comment though because you didnt point to anything that I could look at and possibly improve, and if you just dont like my writing then maybe you should find some that you do like to comment on or if youre trying give constructive criticism, then skip the insults and just give the criticism.

Anonymous said...

meh...

Linda said...

Anonymous comments are always what they are -- anonymous and not worthy of comment because they never say what is what and so they lose because they are scared. That's okay. Please get better. To my mind, anyone who can't sign their name to what they say is worthless.
My name is Linda.

zonedin said...

I could trade you for some California Meyers Lemons. They're the juiciest, sweetest lemons you'll ever taste:~)

haze said...

i agree with Linda... :)
i don't think your comments are annoying (they're kinda sweet, actually) and so are your posts :)

cheer up, rob! :)

Dulce said...

Our universe seen as- connected to mandarin and syrup... poignant and beautiful metaphor...

lvroftiques said...

Wow what a wonderful way of "being" I'm enchanted by your words! And your comment was quite likely the lovliest I've ever received. Vanna

joanny said...

Ah sweet and delicious words, like having discovered some thing new in paradise and deciding whether to eat it or savor it for later,

lovely metaphors,

joanny

thanks for visiting my blog

Simran said...

Beautifully expressed with exact words :)
Liked that you did something different from others..

Keep writing :D

Siddhartha Joshi said...

I had to read it thrice to actually get the entire poem :) But once I was on, completely enjoyed it!

Simran said...

Thanks for visiting to my blog and following me but I don't post there anymore...Visit my blog ''My Friendship'' and follow if you like it :)

Take care

rivercat said...

to all, thanks for the comments, until your blogs die or I freak out and quit blogging, I will be reading what you have to say :)

simran, i tried to follow "my friendship" blog but the followers box and all the followers were blanked out and only the words followers remained with nothing to click to follow. I couldnt find a link to follow on top of the page or anywhere else so I went to your other blog.I will try again and hopefully it was just a temporary blogger malfunction :)

lvroftiques said...

Awwww thanks RC! and I'm feeling like a happy mandarin *winks* Vanna

dead-girl said...

Hi rivercat, I like the poem and the picture :)

you write happy poems.

oh, btw my blog is closed for now i might open it back soon.but i will still be reading here.

rivercat said...

thanks dead. you are a natural at art and you seem smart. i hope you bring the blog back. im having company over so im taking a week off the blog and writing to clean my house and fix up the yard. thank god for company or my place would be a disaster :)

myinnerchick.com said...

"syrup of our
mandarin universe"
Yes, I like that !!!!!!

Nicole✗✗ said...

Thank you for your lovely comment!! That is so awesome about Cindy Crawford!! I think I remembered hearing about her being good in school but Chemical Engineer and Valedictorian!? That isn't easy stuff. I can definitely see why they called her "baby gia" they share a similar look.

I hope you have a great weekend!! : )

amstothers said...

'Beautiful' Captures the imagination.. :)

tywo said...

Oh, these words gladden my heart!


LOVE!

rivercat said...

thanks for the kind comments nicole, tywo, amsto, and myinner :)

to taste the juice from one of these oranges explains poetry and its shortcomings

but its still not quite as good as making a connection of some kind with that someone you love... but it's close!

Anna Sergi said...

I love the 'infinite of yes' image <3

Brittany said...

What tasteful and salivating words!

rivercat said...

anna & brittany , thanks for the savory and scrumptious comments :)

margg. said...

a truly beautiful poem.

i love mandarins.
haha.
xo

rivercat said...

thanks margg. :)